Urbane_Guerrilla: Yep; gotta lose something like ninety percent of the modifiers. Too many adjectives and adverbs are the sign of utterly amateur writing. It shows an amateurishness so great as to suggest there's no love at all for the prose -- that they are there to make the writing unreadable. Assuming this is a seventh-grader's attempt at porn writing, we could hope that time would cure. A word of friendly advice to the writer: don't offer this opus to a publisher. It will come back by return mail in the included self-addressed envelope. You did include one, right?
ALL THAT SHIT by You ?